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Modern day information transfer is nothing short of a revolution, and in order to compete there are inventions that include free, or no

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Modern day information transfer is nothing short of a revolution. And in order to compete there are inventions that include free, or no

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Individual connecting points, or terminals, connecting to one homogenous medium of exchange and here you may want to know a thing or two about electricity and the concept of how electricity finds the path of least resistance.

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Individual connecting points, or terminals, connecting to one homogenous medium of exchange, and here you may want to know a thing or two about electricity and the concept of how electricity finds the path of least resistance.

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Person C is informed about the impending crime and Person C is generous, or honest, or merely a talkative blabbermouth, or the town crier, or a Modern Day Paul Revere, a whistle blower, informer, news outlet, author, writer, sign maker, inventor, producer, and maintainer of vital questions and competitive answers, intending to connect the information about criminals to each current or potential victim.

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Person C is informed about the impending crime and Person C is generous, or honest, or merely a talkative blabbermouth, or the town crier, or a Modern Day Paul Revere, a whistle blower, informer, news outlet, author, writer, sign maker, inventor, producer and maintainer of vital questions and competitive answers, intending to connect the information about criminals to each current or potential victim.

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benefits of doing crime on the criminal scale of cost over benefit.

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benefits of doing crime on the criminal-scale of cost over benefit.

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Knowing how to get past the resistance to factual, accurate, information, a handy skill, is a skill that works to get past, get around, the false, inaccurate, deceptive versions of history.

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Knowing how to get past the resistance to factual, accurate information (a handy skill) is a skill that works to get past and get around the false, inaccurate, deceptive versions of history.

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and therefore this information if it is true, can empower the current victims, and the potential victims,

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and therefore this information if it is true, can empower the current victims and the potential victims,

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he thought was "of interest to Gold Bugs." You know: the concept of a 3-sided fence.

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he thought was "Of Interest to Gold Bugs." You know, the concept of a 3-sided fence:

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Get this Tar Baby off my dinner table, what am I paying you to do?”

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Get this Tar Baby off my dinner table! What am I paying you to do?”

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Added an additional return after the Joe Quote at the top of the page so that the spacing would be the same as the spacing at the top of the other chapters.

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The concept that falsehoods are dressed up to masquerade as truth, and that these costumes are worn by people, is necessary to understand and expose the lies perpetrated upon humankind.

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The concept that falsehoods are dressed up to masquerade as truth, and that these costumes are worn by people, is necessary to understand in order to expose the lies perpetrated upon humankind.

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Torture and Murder made Legal, actions, perpetrated by guilty people upon innocent people.

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Torture and Murder made Legal: actions, perpetrated by guilty people upon innocent people.

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Which version sends the more accurate, higher quality, lower cost, message through the medium of exchange

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Which version sends the more accurate, higher quality, lower cost message through the medium of exchange

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7. Documented ongoing Conspiracies versus a nebulous THING called "Conspiracy Theory" that exists like a boogie man lurking in the darkness of falsehood.

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7. Documented ongoing Conspiracies versus a nebulous THING called "Conspiracy Theory" that exists like a boogie man lurking in the darkness of falsehood

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"I can understand and see that value in a privately sovereign individually based and issued currency."

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"I can understand and see that value in a privately sovereign, individually based and issued currency."

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I am currently in a quandary on page 22 as what I though was the rule with quotes and punctuation may have changed per http://typedesk.com/2011/02/15/chicago-manual-of-style-16th-edition-2/

Note the statement: "And who knows? Perhaps in another hundred years the semicolon will find its way back inside the closing quotation marks."

I am finding that question marks as well, may not all belong in quotes...

I am also wondering if all titles in the book like Equitable Commerce should be italicized...going to call it quits for tonight and start fresh tomorrow.

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At some point the decision to stay inside the lines, illustrated by the child's coloring book, removes too much freedom, and creating becomes difficult.

I am benefiting from your help in punctuation, finding myself gaining a sense of disciplined understanding concerning symbol arrangements in specific order, so as to help transfer meaning intact, by avoiding too much ambiguity in language.

Up to a point, this works, and then I get too caught up in the mechanics, as if the need to convey a message steps down off the list of things to do.

When it is my turn again to edit the final book, I don't want to change anything without having your OK to do so, at that point, and in that effort, if you are willing, I can learn how to keep inside the lines better, improve the power to communicate accurately, and avoid conflicts in understanding why things are done the way they are done, when the idea is to communicate accurately.

I guess I am saying that I appreciate your help, greatly, once again.


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... a sense of disciplined understanding concerning symbol arrangements in specific order, so as to help transfer meaning intact, by avoiding too much ambiguity in language.

That is the main point of punctuation that I am doing now. I for the most part have felt that I have corrected most (not perfectly) of the "staying in the line" issues.

What I have been working on is making reading for the reader more understandable. At least that is what I am trying to do.

I am also trying to keep the same form though out the document.

Yesterday, on page 22 I ran across places with "? and with ?"

As you know, I have stated that ? goes inside the " but I ran across info yesterday that I think says otherwise, so I would like to know which is correct. It seems that American sand the Britians also follow different rules...

I will try not to get wrapped around the axle, being more precise than necessary. I think the most important at this point is to pick a way and be consistent.

So of course, I would like to pick the "right" way, so I am going ot research a little further.

I have been listenting to the Bengazi hearings this morning but am getting ready to pause that and start book work.

Would it be best if I didn't talk to you while you are trying to write a fiction?

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5/9/13 Acknowledgments (I have decided to start at the beginning of the book to ensure that italics and quotes are incorporated correctly/consistently.)

The Daily Paul connects the individual perspectives that would be singularly connected to the Monopoly Viewpoint otherwise.

To acknowledge my brother Jack, whose help is immeasurable, there is one of his poems offered on the last page.

Decided not to italicize The Daily Paul (even though it would fit the "rules" to do so since it is a name of a forum). However, I did remove a comma from the last sentence (which I had earlier missed):

To acknowledge my brother Jack whose help is immeasurable, there is one of his poems offered on the last page.

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I would also like Josf to note that his daughter is the only person in his mentioned family whose first name is not given. That may be artistic intent in the way that her name is given for the cover art, but on the cover art, her name is mentioned, but not that she is your daughter. I don't bring this up so that you will change anything, I just wanted to make sure that that is definitely the way you want it.

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I agree with the concept of being consistent, and I think the American way is preferable over the English way, for reasons that you may guess.

The Fiction work, as far as I can guess, will be a disciplined effort to get on task, and then stay on task, in fits of creativity, like music. I will probably find early morning sessions to be opportunities in this process, instead of picking up the guitar, I will have inspiration to write my thoughts into fictional story lines, and in time I may learn how to fuel that process. For today the inspiration was non-existent, compared to the other day when I threw myself into it.

Meanwhile a second book on The Liberty Day Challenge could be moved ahead. I don't know how this works. The concept of being an author instead of being a laborer is still foreign. I worked as a mechanic, laborer, machine operator, etc. for so many years. It is in my blood.

My wife and I spoke about my present role as housekeeper, cook, parent, the things she did, before I was no longer in demand as a laborer, before she drove herself into being a competitive business operator.

The first book may provide evidence, or justification, in authorship combined with publishing power?




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Meanwhile a second book on The Liberty Day Challenge could be moved ahead. I don't know how this works. The concept of being an author instead of being a laborer is still foreign. I worked as a mechanic, laborer, machine operator, etc. for so many years. It is in my blood.

My wife and I spoke about my present role as housekeeper, cook, parent, the things she did, before I was no longer in demand as a laborer, before she drove herself into being a competitive business operator.


I can imagine using the body ia a different way is a new thing to learn. But, in my mind, it is the body that is being used, whether it is the brain and the strong muscles to acheive one kind of labor, or the brain and the soft muscles to acheive another kind of labor. Both kinds of labor are products of your mind, your ability, your muscles, and your time.

Yes, I suppose one can command their body muscles to do whatever they demand (within reason), and it is different to command the mind to be artistic on demand. Sure, your fingers may be willing to type, but the mind may not be creative at the given moment. I think there is something called writer's block. Some writers go away to secluded areas so that they can write. Their characters become real to them and the rest of life pales in significance as writing is achieved.

Joe, you are extremely intelligent. It is wonderful that you can use your mind now as a new kind of laborer as well as you were able to use your mind and muscles as a different kind of laborer. But you still labor. I used to come home mentally spent and exhausted when I worked at NASA. I was not so much physically spent because my days were at a desk.

I remember the story you told me about sleeping while dumping rock. So, you may have been able to put your mind in nuetral at times? Maybe writing can work the same way?

It was rude of me to start a conversation with you while you were writing even if I did have questions, I should have refrained. After all, I have book work to do as well. :)

I will try to get this finished ASAP. I have developed the concept of setting my kitchen timer for 30 minute intravals so that I get other things done too. Bookwork 30 minutes; housework 30 minutes. I am eating my bookwork time right now. It is much more pleasant for me to talk than consentrate. But, I think now that my meds are halved I can overcome what is more pleasant and do what is most necessary. The doc and I talked about that concept. Makes sense that I was too laid back to do anything that took effort...of course I have issues with lack of sunlight and it has been a long winter and spring has been mostley cloudy.

I will be happy to work on Liberty Day Challenge too even if you are writing a fiction. No problem with having a storehouse? A manifestation of labor in the form of capital? After all there is a message to put forth!

I got a phone call recording from Ron Paul today by Campaign for Liberty...it seems the gang of 8 is hiding a national ID card complete with biometrics within the undocumented worker legislation. US Citizens will not be able to work without that card according to Ron Paul.

They wanted me to sign a petition and send money. You never know who you are talking to on the phone these days. It could all be a set up as far as I'm concerned. How could one know?

Revelation 13:17 KJV
And that no man might buy or sell, save he that had the mark, or the name of the beast, or the number of his name.

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